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Will you please disgust me
Discuss me behind your backs
Point out with your eyes
Use your hands to hide the facts
That are eight tenths fiction
Can't you see
I am nothing but a death marker now
A slab of cement that shows
Where I truly am
But that too, is a lie
I walk the streets
At night
Wondering what I'm searching for
There you go
Whispering again
I can't see you lips
But I hear the words
"Freak," you say
Among other words
"He looks like that boy who died
Just over a year ago"
I glance your way
And you giggle as I look away
I've almost got it figured out
Why the sunlight burns so much
Why I can't go a day without that taste
I craved so much while I was alive
But I need now that I am...
Now that I am what?
Dead?
Undead?
Perhaps.
Do I care?
No.
Night after night
I stroll by you
As each night
You begin to recognize me just a little bit more
Always the gasp and the increased heart beat as I get closer
Always that same word falling out of your mouth
I can't wait until I decide to stalk you
They were right, all the story tellers
When they said that things like me could taste fear
It's such a sweet and satisfying taste
I can smell it every night as I walk by you
It makes me want you more
I crave your taste
I walk by again
Is tonight the night?
I could break their necks
And chase you down the alley as you scream
I get closer
Ah, the smell is so strong
I walk by
Not tonight, darling
Not tonight
:iconunshattered:
I have fifteen minutes in which to write a poem while I get ready for work...can I do it?
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:iconstrangechilde:
That was so ... so ... how the hell can I wrap "amazing", "creepy" and that weird tingly feeling in the back of my brain into one description? Meh, I'm not even gonna try. Fabulous, darling.
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~snazy-a-tastic Jul 22, 2004   Photographer
I can't compete with the other comments but it was amaztasticing!
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:icondeadambition:
woah thats great your writting is amazing ood job!
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:iconnolight:
oh..wow. this is really..really good. sometimes i swear your poetry seems like its based of reality then you cover it up with something but you have real feelings in it. its werid..but very good. ah dont know if that made much sence, but you know what i mean.
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:iconunshattered:
It's my wonderful imaginiation.
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:iconxwhisperx:
Will you please disgust me
Discuss me behind your backs
Point out with your eyes
Use your hands to hide the facts
That are eight tenths fiction
((this first section is a wonderful play on words and rythmn that seems to flow easily from one line to the next))
Can't you see
I am nothing but a death marker now
A slab of cement that shows
Where I truly am
But that too, is a lie
I walk the streets
At night
Wondering what I'm searching for
((the story starts.. i'm supposing a dead soul wandering the earth.. seems obvious)the parallel being the person in life that isn't really living, just going through the motions off some where in another world)
There you go
Whispering again
I can't see you lips
But I hear the words
"Freak," you say
Among other words
"He looks like that boy who died
Just over a year ago"
I glance your way
And you giggle as I look away
I've almost got it figured out
Why the sunlight burns so much
Why I can't go a day without that taste
I craved so much while I was alive
But I need now that I am...
Now that I am what?
Dead?
Undead?
Perhaps.
Do I care?
No.
Night after night
I stroll by you
As each night
You begin to recognize me just a little but more
Always the gasp and the increased heart beat as I get closer
Always that same word falling out of your mouth
I can't wait until I decide to stalk you
They were right, all the story tellers
When they said that things like me could taste fear
It's such a sweet and satisfying taste
I can smell it every night as I walk by you
It makes me want you more
I crave your taste
I walk by again
Is tonight the night?
I could break their necks
And chase you down the alley as you scream
I get closer
Ah, the smell is so strong
I walk by
Not tonight, darling
Not tonight
((yay fun suspense feel from a .. stronger being.. but not really, stronger in capability not really mentally only empowered by anger))) anywho i'm rambling.
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:iconunshattered:
Thanks for the comment. I missed your cool comments.
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:iconxwhisperx:
cool? heh. sure. if you insist. i just get soo backed up with things to comment on that i just say screw it and wait a while till it calms down again and go back where i started.. sorry i'll just get too pissed off to where i don't enjoy commenting anymore.. ya know?
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:iconkarlthehippy:
Dude!
That was awesome!
Creepy... but awesome.
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:iconunshattered:
Heh. Just think next time you call someone freak
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